A Piece and Moment From Within My Vignette
The annoyed Man begins
to throw a dictator-like tantrum,
blushing completely red
and in a gestural like motion moving his hands aggressively, and comparably to Adolf
Hitler over the preaching Woman. The preaching Woman hangs on to the bus rail for
support in the case that she won't tilt over while the bus sways her and the Man back and forth, like a
new born in a cradle being rocked. The preaching Woman is successful in completely ignoring the
Man, and keeps her volume the same and remains emotionally composed, as if the Man
existed only in bad dream or some MTA matrix of some sort, and not once does she attempt
to speak louder than the shouting Man.
My Reflection
This very intense and climatic scene that i included in my vignette seemed to reveal two very distinct behaviors and levels of reactions among-st people and how they interact with one another. In this part of my vignette, it can be acknowledged that the preaching Woman is truly a humble Woman, and is disciplined through and by her devotion to God and has completely avoided reacting or defending herself against the Man in a way that may degrade or disprove her level of Christianity and represents being a Christian the best way possible by not being confrontational. It takes true spiritual discipline to not come out of your good element especially when someone is in your face tempting you in every way they can just to get a reaction out of you . As for the Man, his mission was clear in that he wanted to express his spite and anger towards the preaching Woman by not holding back and making aggressive and ugly attempts to shut the Women up and in a sense, shun the preaching Woman's spirit. From this, we can observe and take note that the preaching Woman, and the revolting Man come from two very different places and between their exchange, we can make out their characters as a person. In writing this piece, I have come to grips that for the first time, I wasn't reflecting or documenting a time, occurrence, moment or experience from my life, but had the chance to tell of a story of two complete strangers, and what took place between them.
I really like the line "as if the Man existed only in bad dream or some MTA matrix of some sort, and not once does she attempt to speak louder than the shouting Man." It's very powerful in the sense that you can tell he's mainly the antagonist in this situation. Very good buildup.
ReplyDeleteSince I was one of the person that read your writing - I still love how you described the characters and how well develop the story of a quick bus ride.
ReplyDeleteThis was a very well documented scene! I thought the use of metaphors and smilies really helped me visualize the encounter between the preaching woman and the angry man. I thought that you described the scene like straight out of a film with intense words which made the piece stand out as a story, not just another typical argument on a normal subway commute.
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